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John Irwin completed a review for
1 month ago
Shadow Walker feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime,Thriller
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I have to say, I'm pretty psyched. I mean, there was hardly a dull moment in the entire script, and that's a major accomplishment. The details, the breakneck pacing, the near-impossible stakes, the building of anticipation (for how difficult Alexa's mission will be, reminds me of a Mission Impossible briefing), everything was terrific. Even the actions lines were the right length. Short and sweet, pack in the right details, keep the scene moving. I'll admit that Dr. Villanueva's kidnapping was a bit hard to follow, but that may be my problem, it's easier to follow those sequences on screen rather than the page. Obviously, with so many characters it can get overwhelming for some people, but it's clear that Alexa is the core of the story, so as long as we have her as some kind of compass, the story should be okay. The twists and turns this script took were really good. I didn't see Eva's plan with her father coming, however it does raise a few questions that you might want to think about: Mainly would there have been a better way to teach Julio the lesson without seriously endangering his life? Eva seems really broken up about it, but at the same time it seems like this was also an attempt at a power grab of the cartel. She's probably the best character in the script in my opinion. I really enjoyed it, and trust me, I don't say that very often. It's been a while since I've enjoyed an amateur script so much. Are there any specific points you'd like me to address? Let me know and I'll see if I can. Have you tried getting more eyeballs on this? I think it's an attention-catcher. Oh, word of warning, I'm not much into action thrilles inspired by true crime (thinking of Narcos), so I can't say how original or not your take on the genre is, but as an outside, I can say it's a thrill.

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Shadow Walker feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime,Thriller
Logline: To stop a civil war, a stealth operative must infiltrate a cartel stronghold, posing as a surgeon, and terminate Venezuela's top crime boss, who's in need of immediate medical attention.
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McCracken feature
Genre: Crime,Drama
Logline: A gangster finds himself in a struggle for power against loyalists to his former boss.
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The Shell feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: After learning his virologist sister is still alive and being held captive after being thought dead, a retired special forces soldier must infiltrate a secret bio-weapons facility to rescue her and steal the cure to a global pandemic.
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