
Cabal
television
An FBI Agent with mysterious capabilities is plagued by unanswered questions of his past while chasing the trail of ominous dark figures that can’t seem to leave him alone.
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Draft #3
Draft #3
2 Reviews |
43 pages |
1 year ago
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Draft 3
Summary
Mr. Robot Meets the X - files.
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I will be addressing format and not story. My apologies to the writer and to the writer of Angels Can Die. Please also see my review for that script as it contains almost all of the same format issues as this one. Format errors create confusion for the reader and that confusion tends to be cumulative. Thus, when a professional reader gets bogged down in format errors early on, he/she stops reading.
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The start of your story did a great job at grabbing my attention. Starting with a chase to save a kidnapped child immediately had me interested. Especially at the end when the supernatural started to pop up. That helped me to immediately know what kind of story I was about to experience.
I also really liked this world that you've built and the mystery that you established early on. I really wanted to know more about those shadow creatures tha...
I also really liked this world that you've built and the mystery that you established early on. I really wanted to know more about those shadow creatures tha...
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