A Lifetime Supply short
#Comedy
By
Grant
Miller
Years after the fall of civilization, the monthly shipments still arrive on time. No matter where Jone's finds himself in this harsh new world, milk's favorite cookie will find him.
Awards
Approved
Winner Draft #1
Summary
3 Reviews |
5 pages |
3 years ago
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Draft 1
Years after the fall of civilization, the monthly shipments still arrive on time. No matter where Jone's finds himself in this harsh new world, milk's favorite cookie will find him.
Industry Reviews
The Script is more of a thought experiment or sketch than anything else but it's a wonderfully absurd short clinically designed to skewer the society we live in today. It illuminates many of our hypocrisies and problems and in some way links them to the future collapse of our society. It’s a fantastic original read and I hope to see it up on the screen sometime soon.
Top Reviewer
Peer Reviews
Here were my thoughts on your script:
1. Concept - Who would've thought that the idea of a man who is crazy for a lifetime supply of Oreos during dystopian times would be a great concept? You definitely took advantage and made the most of it here.
2. Story - The story was funny to read as the man slowly slips into insanity, especially at the very end when he receives his package. I personally just wish this script was longer so he could go...
Top Reviewer
This was a funny concept and funny execution. Besides a few technical issues listed below, the biggest issue was there was no where to take it beyond the current page count. It would make a hysterical video clip but unfortunately nothing more (as far as I can see).
Your logline has Jone's when it should be Jones'
The final was was 30 years ago - is prose and the only way to tell us is a SUPER: 30 years after the fail
You need to give J...
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