Swerk television
#Comedy
By
Luke
Foster
A mid twenties online sex worker struggles with life's challenges, and her hilarious predicaments
Awards
Approved
Nominee Draft #1
Summary
2 Reviews |
23 pages |
3 years ago
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Draft 2
Sophie is an online sex worker, her parents & friends are not aware of this.. Except her postman & one of her roommates,
It gives a realistic view on the online sex industry (onlyfans etc) whilst also showing how ignorant some men can be when it comes to sex and women in general.
Apologies for errors in formatting I have only started learning it!
This is just the pilot so not all characters or issues have been addressed... this is my second draft which I feel is much improved from my first one!
It gives a realistic view on the online sex industry (onlyfans etc) whilst also showing how ignorant some men can be when it comes to sex and women in general.
Apologies for errors in formatting I have only started learning it!
This is just the pilot so not all characters or issues have been addressed... this is my second draft which I feel is much improved from my first one!
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A strong idea for a sitcom using a situation relevant to the digital age. The characters could use some fleshing out, and there are far too many flashbacks, but by and large there is a strong potential here.
As the writer mentioned, there are some minor formatting issues. The issues do not detract from the reading, but would likely result in a hinderance to contest or pitch performance. Recommend reviewing https://www.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/...
Top Reviewer
After reading Sophie's story, my first association was to combine Olive from "Easy A" and Kat from "Euphoria". I think these are very good associations because both were strong protagonists and Sophie also has a chance to join them.
She has a chance because your script lacks a few key elements that will allow viewers to get to know Sophie better and identify with her problems, root for her, and understand why she is doing it.
In Euphoria, K...
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Although not traditional, I found the format you used worked well and easy to read. There are minor spelling issues: "inn" instead of "in" and the first line where she states "I've heard them all me, Jealous twats" I think you want to get rid of "me". I think you should make it more clear that Neil is the postman when you first list his name. Also I thought it was contradictory when you make it seem like she started doing this type of sex work du...
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