Three Taps short
#Romance #Drama
By
Teigh
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A woman breaks up with her remote hogging boyfriend in an unexpected way.
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The shorter the short, the harder it is to create the scene, develop the characters and drive to a climax. I liked the story. The concept was unique and has many different avenues it could take. I felt that the structure, character development and the dialogue could use some work. Being only five pages, I wondered how it would flesh out. We know Benjamin looks the slacker part, but is that it? Why does Jennifer want him gone? Just the remote?...
Definitely an interesting read. Here were my thoughts:
1. Concept - The concept was pretty ludicrous and funny with the idea of an altercation due to the use of a television remote. Although with this script being only 5 pages, you can only do so much with it.
2. Story - There wasn't a whole lot of a story to follow, but what there was, was a simple one. The girl breaks up with the boyfriend for hogging the remote only to hog it herself, in...
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