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By Stefano Pavone
Action/Adventure,Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Mystery/Suspense

A trio of mercenaries investigate a secret organisation turning young women into invincible assassins while a former rockstar tries to rescue his sister from the cult's clutches. With the aid of a former spy, they take it upon themselves to destroy the evil syndicate behind the conspiracy.

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Draft #4
Peer Rating: 60%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 24: 60%
Draft 4: 93%

Summary

The year is 1989 and the fall of Communism is imminent. Erik Lindblom, a fallen prog-rocker, is determined to rescue his younger sister, Elsa, who has been captured and brainwashed to be an assassin as part of Project Athena, a controversial experiment to create the ultimate warrior, by corrupt scientist Sorina Manescu. To do so, he gets close to Yasmin Salibi, heiress to the 5 Elements, a secret and powerful organisation with ties to Project Athena, in order to uncover the truth.



In a parallel storyline set in 2019, the Rhodium Golems - three soldiers of fortune consisting of Vincenzo Corbucci, a sympathetic pilot with a weakness for damsels in distress; Nikolai Rostavili, an ex-Spetsnaz officer with a filthy mouth and a bad attitude; and Jacques Dubois, a former Gendarme with the gift of the silver tongue - inadvertently get entangled when they awaken Oriental beauty Hiroka Noguchi from cryogenic stasis during a routine scavenging mission.



As the past meets the present, the mercenaries with morals and the mysterious megacorp must work together in order to thwart a renegade faction led by the evil roboticist, who plans to use Project Athena to take control of the 5 Elements in order to shape the future of humanity.

Industry Reviews

The script delivers on the expectations of the genre in terms of action and spectacle, but to really create a good story is needs to focus on the characters, especially the protagonist, and their flaw and arc and what the script is saying through that arc. You’ve got all the ingredients for an exciting sci-fi espionage story here but the world and plot points need reordering, using the discipline of storytelling to give those moments emotional me...

11 months ago | read more...
Blaise Hesselgren Top Reviewer

Peer Reviews

Overall I would rate your screenplay a 8.5/10. As far as structure, everything is on point, the action, character, dialogue, etc. I also liked how you did subtle things like italicizing to show highlight subtiltles. The script definitely flows well and with the main characters and side characters I believe everyone gets equal screentime here. One thing I might add, is that considering Erik is one of the main characters its good to see him drive t...

3 weeks ago | read more...
James Odulaja Top Reviewer
There are many more positives than negatives in this review. The negatives are not critical and can be solved. I liked the international flavor with scenes presented all over the world. All characters are strong and well developed. At first, I was put off by the sub-titles, but I eventually understood them to enforce the international aspect of this story. The following points are detailed, referring to specific pages and concerns. In creating s...

1 year ago | read more...
Paul Vecchiet Top Reviewer

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