It Hides Under The Stairs short
#Horror
By
Nether
City
A young boy names Rob lives in a nice home with his parents but has to struggle with a new horrifying reality.
Awards
Approved
Nominee Draft #2
Summary
2 Reviews |
3 pages |
1 year ago
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Draft 2
Rob tries to get well rested but hears nosies from a small close downstairs, as he investigates he sees his mother but something is off. Soon his "mother" disappears, as Rob runs into his bedroom hiding room as something calls him. After a while he thinks the coast if clear and make a break for his parents room before he runs into the creature.
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Peer Reviews
Story has potential once characterization and dialogue are improved.
Top Reviewer
This is definitely a start to what doesn't need to be a feature-length horror but a short that needs to be more fleshed out. I found myself disappointed by ambiguity and wanted more out of it. Being ambiguous is never bad, but try to explore the story's background more. With these elements being improved, the rest of the issues will also improve. I hope this helps.:)
Top Reviewer
Overall, it's a 5.7/10 as it stands with the potential of an 8.0/10 with reworking and rewriting. I say its ceiling is an 8/10 because of my personal preferences and that the story near the end reads as if there is some mysterious gateway to another plane, world, or something where these "entities" come from (possibly the negative world of ours). I've seen that story a few times already so that is why an 8 is my ceiling.
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