A Korean-American archeologist wakes up in the middle of the Sahara desert after the terrorist-hijacked plane crash landed, only to realize that he is the final missing piece of the upcoming nuclear war.
Alex Kim is an Archeology professor at University of Chicago. After hearing the news of a new excavation site, he leaves his almost-due pregnant wife to visit Egypt. On his flight however, he is confronted by two 'proclaimed' government agents who claim that there is a terrorist on board the plane. The passenger sitting next to Alex hands him a piece of paper and takes out his gun to shoot at the two agents. The gunfight inside the plane causes the plane to crash in the middle of the Saharan Desert. After waking up near the crash site, Alex realizes that the first responders were sent to kill all the remaining survivors. Shocked, Alex decides to escape the area on foot across the Great Saharan Desert. A Swedish couple on vacation spots an unresponsive Alex and takes him into their haven, not knowing the bounty on Alex's head. Alex soon realizes he became the world's most wanted man and is being framed a terrorist. As he runs away from Algerian mercenaries, American government, Russian spys, and others wanting him dead, Alex must clear his name and protect the ones he love.
The logline is good but can be better. It conveyed the message but it can be made to be more catchy. The first ten pages is fair but it could also be so much better. The story started in the most normal way. I was hoping I will get to see this guy on a job so we ca...
The first ten pages are interesting, even if we're triggered onto something different than what we are dealing with further in the story. I was hooked by the potential of the story. The discussion with David could be shortened but it's ok...
The concept is pretty strong and compelling. It's full of twist and turns that drive the story and make it original but high concept enough that any fan of action/thrillers will enjoy.
- Does the logline/first ten pages draw the reader?
The logline is on point and the first ten pages set things up to be VERY enticing. Things are set up properly and give enough plot for you to anticipate that things will only...