Karl, An overworked insurance worker, finds himself working into the late hours of the night. In a bid to break free from the shackles of his miserable life, he contemplates escape and sets out to leave his desperate existence behind him. As he delves into the fantasy of escapism, his responsibilities threaten to entrap him in a painful cycle of duty and burden.
This was a great first draft for a silent drama short that impressively applies the "show, don't tell" method to writing a story and giving depth to the main character. With a few minor changes suggested above, I think this script could be truly amazing. Good luck!
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