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By Reece Allen
Drama,Family

A student picks up his younger brother from school and discovers his dark secret.

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Draft #1
Peer Rating: 67%
Industry Rating: 53%
2 Reviews | 3 pages | 3 months ago | Draft 1

Summary

A student picks up his younger brother from school and discovers his dark secret. I made this for an assignment that had a max of 3 pages.

Industry Reviews

Well written but definitely needs more context and story around it.

2 weeks ago | read more...
Script Mother Top Reviewer

Peer Reviews

Well, to start off you did a good job considering the limitations of only being able to use three pages. A couple of things formatting-wise, when you're introducing a character their names have to be in all caps. The way you used parentheticals is okay but it's not really necessary. It can be used as an action line if you really need to have that in the story. For the most part, parentheticals are only needed when there's a group of people and t...

1 month ago | read more...
Amari Russell Top Reviewer

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