This story lacks structure. Perhaps consider thinking in terms of set up (where we meet Christos, and possibly his ex), then an inciting incident (where Christos gets dumped), a midpoint (where Christos must make some kind of choice) and a good climax (where he confronts his ex, trying to get her back, perhaps). These are just some suggestions. As it stands, the story feels a little random. A guy walks down some path, calls out to God, coincident...
Following the death of his mother, a playwright loses his purpose. He goes out into the middle of the ocean for inspiration and gets stuck there. In his last moments alive, he begins to tell his life in the form of a standup routine told to an imaginary audience.
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