Checkpoint Charlie television
#Animation #Sci-Fi/Fantasy #Action/Adventure
A Russian-American teenager teams up with a CIA agent to wreak havoc in the Eastern Bloc and find his parents.
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Summary
2 Reviews |
40 pages |
7 months ago
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Draft 2
After losing everything, a teenager goes on a quest to get revenge against the perpetrators that changed his life forever and to find the last remnants of his family.
Industry Reviews
Overall, you have a lot of moving story pieces that can make a great TV series. By the end of the script, you make it clear to your audience Aidan is going to be going on a journey full of action and excitement. However, what's left behind is Aidan's inner journey. This inner journey needs to be the real story. It's Aidan's journey to find his place in the world.
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Peer Reviews
Much, much, much to do. I think starting with format, i learned to write and format by seeing videos and reading articles. I was very bored reading this, and i have been told my writing is hard to follow. but this was, and practice makes perfect. To be a screenwriter it takes two things talent and creativity. you got the creativity part down. Now, just build up to being a talented writer cause i know it's there. maybe practice writing shorter mov...
Top Reviewer
Overall, the script for this first episode is a fantastic read. It flows perfectly to have an exhilarating start and get you hooked. Some improvement on characters who meet their end, in the beginning will benefit the weight it carries in the beginning and for the backstory of Adian. The dialogue, structure, and story were all awesome and engaging. Well done :)
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