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Space In Between Us short

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#Drama

A glimpse into certain parts of Sarah and John's relationship, but they start to grow apart.

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Summary

2 Reviews | 10 pages | 1 year ago | Draft 1
Just looking for thoughts

Industry Reviews


This has great potential to be a hard hitting drama about how it can be when two people fall out of the love. This currently feels like the beginning of making that script, and with proper revising, I think this short script will become that great. Hopefully my feedback will help you with future drafts, and good luck!

Peer Reviews

The concept of going back and forth between the meet cute and the end of the line between them is interesting. This is true in a lot of relationships where people do drift apart. Effectively the honeymoon phase ending and stuck in a rut or the relationship running it's course.
This however is a double-edged sword. You attempted to use flashbacks. Flashbacks should be used sparingly and only when necessary, which they were not formatted correctly...

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