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#Comedy
By
Kathleen
Hof
After losing girlfriends for being insensitive, four jokester brothers strive to become girl magnets by using their winning Powerball formula to guide one needy person to change their life in exchange for the multimillion dollar jackpot. Inspired by the brothers behind www.lotterylogix.com
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57 pages |
1 year ago
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Bradley, Raymond, Justin and Eric are math savants which they proved by picking the winning numbers for the powerball lottery. They also love to play video games and believe video games can help guide a person through the pitfalls of real life.
One day, they take a class, run by a charity, to understand and ultimately help the homeless. Instead of taking the experience seriously, they joke around and make fun of life on the streets. As a result, the Charity Director publicly throws them out of the class. Word spreads quickly and their girlfriends break up with them. No girls will date them, accusing them of being selfish and insensitive.
Wondering if they really might be insensitive and concerned no girls will date them, they decide to show everyone, especially girls, they are selfless. Their method - win the powerball again and offer one needy person a deal. Using their vast life experience learned through video game play, the Brothers will guide the person in need through the necessary steps to positively change their life. If successful, the brothers will hand them the multimillion dollar jackpot.
The Brothers start with a young innocent girl named Serenity who's living on the streets, caring for her three younger siblings, because their mom is addicted to crack cocaine. In the beginning everything goes great. But, then, life's unexpected pitfalls punch them all in the gut. Through it all, despite learning video games are not the gold standard for life, the Brothers never give up the jokester part of their personalities. They hilariously guide the family through life's minefield.
Ultimately, Serenity, her siblings and their Mom positively change their lives. Mom conquers her addiction. Serenity and her siblings give up their street tent for a house and change their source of food from a dumpster to a grocery store. As they look forward to the future, Serenity walks away with the 102 million dollar jackpot.
When girls discover the Brother's sensitive side, they inundate them with dates.
In the end, the Brothers feel so fantastic knowing they helped a desperate family in need, they decide to do it all over again.
One day, they take a class, run by a charity, to understand and ultimately help the homeless. Instead of taking the experience seriously, they joke around and make fun of life on the streets. As a result, the Charity Director publicly throws them out of the class. Word spreads quickly and their girlfriends break up with them. No girls will date them, accusing them of being selfish and insensitive.
Wondering if they really might be insensitive and concerned no girls will date them, they decide to show everyone, especially girls, they are selfless. Their method - win the powerball again and offer one needy person a deal. Using their vast life experience learned through video game play, the Brothers will guide the person in need through the necessary steps to positively change their life. If successful, the brothers will hand them the multimillion dollar jackpot.
The Brothers start with a young innocent girl named Serenity who's living on the streets, caring for her three younger siblings, because their mom is addicted to crack cocaine. In the beginning everything goes great. But, then, life's unexpected pitfalls punch them all in the gut. Through it all, despite learning video games are not the gold standard for life, the Brothers never give up the jokester part of their personalities. They hilariously guide the family through life's minefield.
Ultimately, Serenity, her siblings and their Mom positively change their lives. Mom conquers her addiction. Serenity and her siblings give up their street tent for a house and change their source of food from a dumpster to a grocery store. As they look forward to the future, Serenity walks away with the 102 million dollar jackpot.
When girls discover the Brother's sensitive side, they inundate them with dates.
In the end, the Brothers feel so fantastic knowing they helped a desperate family in need, they decide to do it all over again.
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Overall, The story is different, funny, and ambitious. My biggest struggle with the story was believing in its concept and how something like that is possible. I like it to be believable since that's the vibe I get from the story. Having them win repeatedly and barely being teenagers was hard to see. Despite this fact, the actual story and structure are fantastic. Some characters and dialogue need work from what I've said about the concept, so fo...
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