Dipped and Died feature
#Sci-Fi/Fantasy
By
mike
harper
Six friends escaped a dark world after a decade, leaving one behind. Three years later, they must return to stop her from coming home.
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97 pages |
2 years ago
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Draft 3
Need fresh eyes on Act 2 & 3 plot structure, and story pacing.
Ten years ago, seven friends were swept into a hellish fantasy world. Six of them returned and moved on with their lives. Three years later, they gather when the leader of the group received a stone sent from the other realm from the one left behind. They must return to a magical, dark world of which they all wish could be forgotten. To stop her, it will come at great cost before its too late.
Nadji (leader), Jennifer (deaf), Paul (ex-boyfriend to Jennifer), Maria and Juan (siblings), Rand (a-hole of the bunch), and Charlet (lost an arm the 1st time) reunite when Samantha (a bit "touched") sends a token for them to return to the hell they all wish to erase from memory.
Ten years ago, seven friends were swept into a hellish fantasy world. Six of them returned and moved on with their lives. Three years later, they gather when the leader of the group received a stone sent from the other realm from the one left behind. They must return to a magical, dark world of which they all wish could be forgotten. To stop her, it will come at great cost before its too late.
Nadji (leader), Jennifer (deaf), Paul (ex-boyfriend to Jennifer), Maria and Juan (siblings), Rand (a-hole of the bunch), and Charlet (lost an arm the 1st time) reunite when Samantha (a bit "touched") sends a token for them to return to the hell they all wish to erase from memory.
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Overall, Dipped and Died was a solid read for a sci-fi script in my opinion. The only things I would focus on is giving your story a tad bit more originality to make it stand out better as well as re-reading over the dialogue a bit more. Other than that, this script was fairly good!
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