Space Junk short
#Comedy #Sci-Fi/Fantasy
An inquisitive alien teen and her awkwardly observant human boyfriend attempt to unravel the mysteries of each other's celestial bodies.
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Winner Draft #1
Summary
2 Reviews |
12 pages |
2 months ago
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Draft 1
In the future an alien race known as the Va'lit, have integrated with humans on Earth. For two teens, a human named Calvin and Va'lit named Velsara make a somewhat impulsive decision to take their relationship to the next level.
They are both however ignorant in the other's physical anatomy and sexual practices. They throw caution to the wind and dive right in with snags along the way of their appearance, physiology, and biology.
They eventually succeed only to be walked in on by Calvin's mom soon afterwards.
They are both however ignorant in the other's physical anatomy and sexual practices. They throw caution to the wind and dive right in with snags along the way of their appearance, physiology, and biology.
They eventually succeed only to be walked in on by Calvin's mom soon afterwards.
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It was pretty good, however, it could stand to be a little shorter. Not enough is really learned about the characters to justify the 12 pages. A six page version of this would feel a lot tighter and function a little bit better. I think the explicitly sexual premise might scare some people off, and my reaction to the first few pages as a result of not being able to read a synopsis definitely show that. However, once I opened my mind to it, it was...
I think I like the writer. However I don't know what a Va'lit is. An alien? Well rounded but a little bit awkward. The writer seems to be about ready for advertising their work. But work is too short to tell.
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