In the future an alien race known as the Va'lit, have integrated with humans on Earth. For two teens, a human named Calvin and Va'lit named Velsara make a somewhat impulsive decision to take their relationship to the next level.
They are both however ignorant in the other's physical anatomy and sexual practices. They throw caution to the wind and dive right in with snags along the way of their appearance, physiology, and biology.
They eventually succeed only to be walked in on by Calvin's mom soon afterwards.
It was pretty good, however, it could stand to be a little shorter. Not enough is really learned about the characters to justify the 12 pages. A six page version of this would feel a lot tighter and function a little bit better. I think the explicitly sexual premise might scare some people off, and my reaction to the first few pages as a result of not being able to read a synopsis definitely show that. However, once I opened my mind to it, it was...
I think I like the writer. However I don't know what a Va'lit is. An alien? Well rounded but a little bit awkward. The writer seems to be about ready for advertising their work. But work is too short to tell.
**THIS IS A SKIT WRITTEN FOR A CONTEST UNDER A STRICT 2 PAGE REQUIREMENT. PLEASE DO NOT INCLUDE FEEDBACK ABOUT LENGTH IN YOUR REVIEW, AND KEEP THE MEDIUM IN MIND.** A man from the future must save an important target
Kaitlynn Dawn Prescott is one week away from a wedding she had in her mind since she was 15. Every thing is set. All that’s left is her fiancé and groomsmen to fly from California, and her step father from Puerto Rico. What could go wrong? It’s Sunday, September 10, 2001.
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