Common sense says that only people reasonably familiar with the series should review this. However, the first feedback I received is almost nothing but the reviewer's own thoughts on where he saw the Firefly stories/relationships going. Essentially, critiquing my script by telling me how he would have written it. Obviously, that isn't helpful.
This takes place some indeterminate time after the events of Serenity. I know nothing about any of the subsequent novels, graphic or otherwise. Admittedly, there is some on-the-nose fan service.
I am a HUGE Firefly fan. Have been since it first aired. I was stationed in Okinawa-Japan and Armed Forces Network .... sorry. I digress. Thank you for sparking a memory lane for a cult favorite syfy show. You have the right tropes, syntax of dialogue, and came close to the interactions among the crew. There were a couple of out-of-place moments. Inara and Zoe break into prison to break Mal and Jayne out. Inara would be reluctant to have a weapon...
The most standout aspect of the script is its loyalty to the series itself. This is an absolute must for a spec script, and "Firefly" is even more distinct than most TV shows, so there is more of a challenge here. There aren't many technical errors, but a tightening up of the action descriptions wouldn't hurt, if you were to consider rewriting in any way.
The climax is very action-packed, and something fans would genuinely appreciate as much a...
This is clearly a very professional script, I'm not entirely sure what I can recommend fixing, but I can certainly tell you everything I liked about your story.
-I really liked the introduction and how you gradually pulled back the layers of the story. In the opening scene, I thought this was going to be some sort of nautical story, then I realized we we're in outer space, then there was a prison riot, then there was an opposing government, t...
A treasure hunter and her android husband must embark on an adventure for a mystical jewel, in order to prevent it falling into the hands of a band of ruthless pirates.
After the Raito kingdom attacks the home town of two brothers, they set off to bring back balance to the world by defeating the Raito God and restoring the Reiki to the world.
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