The pilot rolls out an introduction to the members of the Kobe community. Cops, business owners, drug dealers, junkies, and a spider that feeds on the blood of a willing human hand.
Overall, a very strong and action-filled story. The violence is great, and you don't hold back. This is a hue plus, but I think the story needs more focus, and you need to come full circle with it in your pilot. This isn't to say that your pilot needs to reveal everything. Quite the opposite. The TV pilot is a jump off point for the characters and the world of your script. So there needs to be a spark that shows us what journey we, the audience,...
I kind of feel bad for Leroy at the beginning of the story. Sure, he's a lowlife junkie, but damn did they do a number on him. The use of drugs is very prevalent throughout the whole story and is done in a believable way. The only criticism I could have about this script would be that a few spots toward the beginning had a little too much description. Which, I know, probably sounds strange as that is the point to perfectly describe the scenes, bu...
YOU awaken on a deserted highway, make your way through a forest of unspeakable horrors, led by a mysterious young girl, fighting to regain your memory before the Hungry find you.
A teenaged Zoe Wood, daughter of Faith and Robin, takes on her role as a Slayer and continues the fight against evil while trying her best to maintain a social life and carry on her family's legacy.
In a small Texas town, an Exorcist struggles to save a boy named Peter from a horrible entity, so gifted 17-year old Muriel Chase is brought in to lure out the demon... and kill it.
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