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By Marlon Schwiersch

A strip dancer is on a quest for revenge on the psychiatrist that ruined her childhood...

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2 Reviews | 127 pages | 1 year ago | Draft 1

#female protagonist #Revenge #dancer #2024 #gothic

Beatrix is a stripper in Brisbane. She dances to pay her rent and put herself through school. One day, she kills a man in his home and goes to Sydney with her flatmate, on a quest for revenge she's been planning for a decade...

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Well written drama thriller drags on a bit too long

Overall, this was a solid thriller script that I could see being turned into a movie with some fine tuning. I would mainly recommend cutting back on the flashback scenes a bit so that the script doesn't feel like it's overstaying its welcome as well as removing filler dialogue and just fixing those weird formats. Glad I got to read and review this and good luck on future drafts!

Cyle Brooks

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Good

Wow. I was not expecting to enjoy your script that much. I thought it was very well written with a very fleshed out main character and I really liked the ending. I think the pacing was fairly good but I think it dragged a little in the middle due to the flashbacks, it was kind of hard to keep track when in time where the movie was. I would also say flesh out the main character's mother more because I feel like I don't know her enough as well as t...

David Rose

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15

Following a childhood trauma, a man who hasn’t stepped foot outside his home in 15 years starts to question his sanity as the only haven he knows transforms into a haunted house when his brother tries to force him out.

Restless Dreams

When James receives an unexpected letter from his lost wife, he sets off to find her in "their special place," a trip that quickly turns into a waking nightmare of twisted monsters.

Galway

Sam, a directionless teenager on the fringes of Galway’s music and party scene, watches the world around her corrode — friendships, bodies, and belief systems melting into one blurred noise.

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Cyle Brooks

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David Rose

Recommended for You

15

Following a childhood trauma, a man who hasn’t stepped foot outside his home in 15 years starts to question his sanity as the only haven he knows transforms into a haunted house when his brother tries to force him out.

Restless Dreams

When James receives an unexpected letter from his lost wife, he sets off to find her in "their special place," a trip that quickly turns into a waking nightmare of twisted monsters.

Galway

Sam, a directionless teenager on the fringes of Galway’s music and party scene, watches the world around her corrode — friendships, bodies, and belief systems melting into one blurred noise.

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