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By Marlon Schwiersch

A strip dancer is on a quest for revenge on the psychiatrist that ruined her childhood...

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2 Reviews | 127 pages | 7 months ago | Draft 1

#female protagonist #Revenge #dancer #2024 #gothic

Beatrix is a stripper in Brisbane. She dances to pay her rent and put herself through school. One day, she kills a man in his home and goes to Sydney with her flatmate, on a quest for revenge she's been planning for a decade...

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Well written drama thriller drags on a bit too long

Overall, this was a solid thriller script that I could see being turned into a movie with some fine tuning. I would mainly recommend cutting back on the flashback scenes a bit so that the script doesn't feel like it's overstaying its welcome as well as removing filler dialogue and just fixing those weird formats. Glad I got to read and review this and good luck on future drafts!

Cyle Brooks

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Good

Wow. I was not expecting to enjoy your script that much. I thought it was very well written with a very fleshed out main character and I really liked the ending. I think the pacing was fairly good but I think it dragged a little in the middle due to the flashbacks, it was kind of hard to keep track when in time where the movie was. I would also say flesh out the main character's mother more because I feel like I don't know her enough as well as t...

David Rose

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We'll Be Safe Up There

During the pandemic, a writer flees the city with his wife and brother to a cabin Upstate - and encounters a murderous cult.

The Show Must Go On

Gabriel lives in a world where people who commit henious crimes like murder, arson, etc. are sentenced with being put in front of live audiences as the style of play before shortly being executed. Gabriel is going to see his first show and it will change the course of his life forever.

Shadow Walker

To stop a civil war, a stealth operative must infiltrate a cartel stronghold, posing as a surgeon, and terminate Venezuela's top crime boss, who's in need of immediate medical attention.

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#Thriller

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Summary

Industry Reviews

Cyle Brooks

Peer Reviews

David Rose

Recommended for You

We'll Be Safe Up There

During the pandemic, a writer flees the city with his wife and brother to a cabin Upstate - and encounters a murderous cult.

The Show Must Go On

Gabriel lives in a world where people who commit henious crimes like murder, arson, etc. are sentenced with being put in front of live audiences as the style of play before shortly being executed. Gabriel is going to see his first show and it will change the course of his life forever.

Shadow Walker

To stop a civil war, a stealth operative must infiltrate a cartel stronghold, posing as a surgeon, and terminate Venezuela's top crime boss, who's in need of immediate medical attention.

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