I know this is supposed to be for a mini-outline but I really would like another pair of eyes to look over this to see if I'm on the right track. I'm kind of sick of looking at this draft at the moment.
I liked this quite a bit. It's a lot better than most of the scripts I've read on here. I still stand that this should be much longer and have a bigger story and the flesh the characters out more. But other than that, good job.
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