Dream Watching short
#Sci-Fi/Fantasy #Drama
A man named the Dream Watcher, who observes the dreams of others, is surprised when one dreamer actually sees him in her dream. Unsure as to why, he shows her through the dreams of others, blurring the line of what's real and what isn't.
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Approved
Nominee Draft #1
Summary
3 Reviews |
35 pages |
1 year ago
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Draft 1
A man known as the Dream Watcher, has spent an unknown amount of time watching the dreams of others. In his travels, he meets Maya, who unlike every other dreamer, actually acknowledges his presence, wanting to figure out why, he takes her through the dreams of multiple people, and the deeper they go, the more they both begin to question their existence.
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A story being set entirely in a dreamscape is original. Having the characters using the black doors as a vehicle to move from one dream to the next was a good touch without confusing the audience or reader. That however is about where it ends.
The Dream Watcher, to me seemed like a otherworldly superior being, but did not talk like one. That said, they seemed to have knowledge of the real world without having been.
The script is very heavy in d...
Top Reviewer
Overall, this could potentially be a really cool, whimsical, thought-provoking short film. The writer has a good sense on proper screenplay format. The writer has also laid out some good foundation for a cool setting for this story to take place. The opening scene is strong and there are some great visuals in this. I noticed on the title page this is a first draft. For a first draft, I think this is a good start.
The problems are mostly with t...
Top Reviewer
Overall I would give your script a 3.75/5 as I think the length will help this get a higher rating and will help develop the story.
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