Cover Image for While We Sleep

While We Sleep short

Sign In to see % Rating

#Drama

A couple caring for their terminally ill son must face reality.

Awards

Approved

Summary

1 Reviews | 8 pages | 5 years ago | Draft 1
Looking for general feedback on the premise, structure, pacing and dialogue.

Industry Reviews

No Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

The concept, character development, and story are fairly defined. The dialogue is pretty realistic, while the structure is great for a short film.

The bursting of an initial argument where the reader does not know the reason why is very interesting. Comparing a broken tube and replacing it with the existential question of keeping or not Hannah and Stephen's son alive, and also Stephen's line: "There are no alternatives, are there?", is the st...

Recommended for You

The Sacrifice

A young girl must make the ultimate sacrifice in order to appease the one she loves.

Pads

A drop of blood on an immaculate floor triggers a face-off between two women

Lana is Alive

The first A.I. humanoid states her case in which her sole purpose is to serve humans and nothing more...

BlogMother

Subscribe
to our Newsletter

Get up-to-date in industry knowledge, Scripts of the Month and more. By subscribing to our newsletter, you'll never miss the best stuff we have to offer.