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While We Sleep short

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A couple caring for their terminally ill son must face reality.

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1 Reviews | 8 pages | 6 years ago | Draft 1
Looking for general feedback on the premise, structure, pacing and dialogue.

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The concept, character development, and story are fairly defined. The dialogue is pretty realistic, while the structure is great for a short film.

The bursting of an initial argument where the reader does not know the reason why is very interesting. Comparing a broken tube and replacing it with the existential question of keeping or not Hannah and Stephen's son alive, and also Stephen's line: "There are no alternatives, are there?", is the st...

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