I'll just go over my thoughts in chronological order as I read your script. (I enjoyed it by the way)
1ST PAGE
- Good character intro and description, immediately paints a clear first impression of who Darius is
- Intriguing situation to start off in, following a trail, searching for a phone… (his own maybe ?)
- (OS), Offscreen or over the shoulder? It’s just a detail but the formatting is wrong, not very clear
- The segment where Darius...
“A devoted immigrant father’s dream of a better life shatters when he is abruptly detained by ICE, forcing his wife and community to fight for justice while grappling with the true cost of the American dream.”
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