I'll just go over my thoughts in chronological order as I read your script. (I enjoyed it by the way)
1ST PAGE
- Good character intro and description, immediately paints a clear first impression of who Darius is
- Intriguing situation to start off in, following a trail, searching for a phone… (his own maybe ?)
- (OS), Offscreen or over the shoulder? It’s just a detail but the formatting is wrong, not very clear
- The segment where Darius...
A senior in highschool finds herself struggling with the demons in her head ultimately trying to refuse possibly the best offer in her life. Soon enough, she finds that those demons end up helping her. Quite literally.
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