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Two half brothers and soul heirs to the Mpezeni kingdom in central Africa who grew up from different worlds must settle their succession dispute in a boxing ring.

Draft #1
Peer Rating: 23%
Industry Rating: N/A
2 Reviews | 110 pages | 1 month ago | Draft 1


After a feeling of being threatened by his brother's arrival in the kingdom. Chad gets tattoo charms to make him stronger. He fights his brother to a near death and runs away from the kingdom. He becomes his a Proffessional boxer. However in the turn of events the brother survives and adopted by an American couple. He comes back for revenge. He challenges him for the title. A mare boxing match complicates in a fierce fight to get on the throne when the king dies.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

I'm going to put the gist of my notes in this section, I have it separated into parts I thought were good, and parts that could use a bit more work and refinement. Please don't take offense to anything I say, I simply want to help make your story as awesome as possible. I like the concept and I like the two main characters of Chadwick and Jane. If you strengthen everything around these core pillars the story will only improve.

What I Liked:...

1 month ago |
Jonathan Barbour Top Reviewer
Ultimately, I cannot recommend that anyone else read this script in its current state and cannot imagine that anyone would want to. The grammar and spelling mistakes are so numerous that I stopped taking any note of them after page 4 and started skimming whenever the errors became too plentiful. The characters are unrealistic and aren’t relatable because the dialogue is rigid and unbelievable. This script needs to be completely rewritten with car...

1 month ago |
Ulysses Macargen Top Reviewer

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