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Super Lame (Episode 1)

short
By Jonathan Barbour
Comedy,Action/Adventure

A pair of news reporters travel the country interviewing superheroes with powers that are less of a blessing and more of a curse.

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Draft #1
Peer Rating: 54%
Industry Rating: 27%
3 Reviews | 6 pages | 6 months ago | Draft 1

Summary

In a world filled with superheroes, somebodies got to get the lame powers. This story follows two news reporters traveling the country, and interviewing various superheroes with powers that oftentimes end up doing more harm than good.

Industry Reviews

SUPER LAME is a weird and surreal short, with some wonderfully odd moments, but it does need more development and thought to really hit home. It's god as as far as it goes but needs more. In my reading, it’s mostly the same tale as King Midas, with violence substituted for gold, and while that’s entertaining and amusing, it doesn’t add anything particularity new to the idea. I would say to really stand out it does need something more – either ext...

6 months ago | read more...
Blaise Hesselgren Top Reviewer

Peer Reviews

Here were my thoughts on your script:

1. Concept - The idea of interviewing people with ludicrous and ridiculous powers is honestly kinda funny. I'd like to see more chaotic or out of the box characters in the future though!

2. Story - The story was easy to follow and was fun to read. It's ridiculous, but has that superhero charm to it still.

3. Structure - Some of the formatting was off. Mainly the parenthetical and character introducti...

6 months ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer
Okay so I loved the concept. Technically it could be a bit Hancockish, but it still works really well. I actually was laughing out loud a couple times while reading the dead dog bit. Although I don't know if that's been done before either. This should be either a feature or a longer script though in my opinion. That is if it were to work because technically the story is starting to become more of a thing which means it could get tired. There is n...

4 months ago | read more...

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