My Little Girl
short
Charles is excited to welcome his darling daughter to his office until an attorney shows up, accusing his firm of sexual harassment.
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24 pages |
5 months ago
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Draft 1
Summary
Soon to retire newspaper magnate, Charles Carling is excited to have his darling daughter join his company until an attorney shows up, accusing his firm of sexual harassment. Things take a dark turn when he finds out who is behind this ghastly lawsuit.
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Provided below is a list of pros and cons. Overall, I think you did a great job with your story, just consider these a few highlights of
things I enjoyed, and little notes that I believe might improve the story.
Pro
-Your dialogue is good. Character react and respond to eachother believably, and no one seems to drag on or monologue for too long.
-Pg. 6. I like how Charles withdraws his plate of cookies after Marta reveals that she's there...
things I enjoyed, and little notes that I believe might improve the story.
Pro
-Your dialogue is good. Character react and respond to eachother believably, and no one seems to drag on or monologue for too long.
-Pg. 6. I like how Charles withdraws his plate of cookies after Marta reveals that she's there...
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