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A simple family drama with a horror twist of an ending. The script was a brisk read and it has good structural bones with believable dialogue, particularly the arguments of the parents. Also, your logline is perfect for the script.

Though the dialogue is well done, there does seem to be a bit too much of it. Too much unnecessary dialogue can slow down the pacing of your script. You should try to find areas in the script where you can lessen th...