In the gritty landscape of South Chicago, Edris Johnson, a troubled teenager entangled in the dangerous web of drugs and crime, experiences a life-altering journey when he encounters a mysterious Old Homeless Man preaching repentance. Edris's path to redemption is fraught with challenges, leading him to a spiritual awakening that transforms not only his life but also those around him.
Spiritual Awakening is an apt title for the story that it tells. Edris is a troubled young man too close to real trouble to not get sucked in. His journey from petty criminal to follower of Christ is told well, despite minor issues. However, I think it would be difficult to pitch the contrasting themes of the story.
Overall, this story is well-crafted, but some specific elements are done poorly and decrease the general quality. I might be wrong, but there's room for improvement. Keep what you have done adequately and fix what needs adjustments. You're halfway there!
SCORE BREAKDOWN:
A. Based on the overall elements:
Story: Good
Concept: Fair
Structure: Poor
Character development: Fair
Dialogue: Poor
A circle of man made stone obelisks emerge from the ground. They are 100ft high and total 5 miles wide, at the centre lies 4 pillars, covered in writing in 8 languages.
Gabriel lives in a world where people who commit henious crimes like murder, arson, etc. are sentenced with being put in front of live audiences as the style of play before shortly being executed. Gabriel is going to see his first show and it will change the course of his life forever.
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