Dibble and Dabble feature

You've got a fantastic premise here and the script is really set alight by the brilliance of the dialogue. The plot makes sense but what really needs work is the underlying story and the thematic argument. This is the hard work but if done correctly will really make the script exceptional. I would concentrate in the next draft on Hank's flaw and his arc and how that arc expresses the thematic argument. For me that argument is around the area of a...