Overall, it's a fun little script. I think my biggest complaint is it's branding as a "Comedy", aside from the very end, there's not many comedic moments or lines in the script. But just work on the dialogue, and maybe try and work this into a bigger script and you can have a very promising screenplay.
This is a well-written short. I am sure it has gone through revisions to come to this stage. There is little that I can add here. Although, I felt Patrick might be one of the firm members who is about to interview Jason.
Although Jason is dressed to kill and has the resume to back his claim to join the firm, Patrick successfully manipulates and extracts information from him. Thus Jason is embarrassed and his massive ego is bruised.
I felt its...
This is what it is. I don't "get" the ending, because even though Jason gave Patrick pointers, Patrick isn't Jason. If Jason was as hot a shot as he's supposed to be, this wouldn't bother him. He also wouldn't be applying for a position, he'd be drowning in people wanting him to defend them.
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