A regular day at Chicago’s O’Hare airport is interrupted by the appearance of a man claiming to be from a country that does not exist.
Based on the urban legend of the same name.
This is a great short that is funny, surprising and absurd, and equal measure. While I’ve offered a few ideas here, the scrip0t is already very very well developed and these are just alternatives that would change the direction of the script and give it a different emphasis but not necessarily improve it. It is all down to the intention of the writer, what he wants to communicate and whether he wants to use these other options.
1. Concept - This is definitely a strange but intriguing concept to write out. I feel like a man from a supposedly nonexistent place and being interrogated was fascinating.
2. Story - The story was decent, albeit a tad predictable, up until the end. The ending was easily the best part of the script and I honestly wish that it could be turned into a feature-length because I wanna know what happens next....
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