In general the script is well written. The concept is not original yet the way the writer interpreted the story is interesting.
In page 8, when the mother is searching for her son, the scene is poorly written, each house she visits to check on her son should be an independent scene and not part of a big scene because again technically a change in scenes occurs when the place or time changes. Sometimes both.
On a personal level the scene at sch...
Ben comes to the Fast Lane bowling alley everyday after school, partly because he idolizes amateur bowler, Jenny "The Comet" Cornell, and partly to escape some dark past.
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