There are several things I don’t understand about the storyline; consequently, I couldn’t connect with your main character, Thomas. After reading it several times, I still can’t say I grasp the story you’re trying to tell—but that’s me.
Welcome to ScriptMother, and thanks for submitting your script, I Hate the Rain, for review. In this review, I will
1) Check the formatting against Industry Standards.
2) Check for spelling, punctuation, and...
This short story is a good start and has the potential to be much better. There are a lot of technical errors throughout the entire script. Most noticeably are the "SCENE ONE, TWO, etc." headings. I encourage the writer to review scripts online that have been produced as a way to understand the proper format. Characters are introduced with too little description and also improperly formatted. The overall dialogue is a little bland and stunted, th...
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