Sink television

Wow, this story has the bones of a prime time series. Even though some may see the story as derivative; 'Once Upon A Time', it is this readers opinion that with the marketability and writers unique voice on this story, that there is truly a chance to make this a reality. That being said i have many critiques and hope they only further your story and your personal style. Most of your 'mistakes', were commonly repeated. Showing not a lack of skill...