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By Marlon Schwiersch

A strip dancer is on a quest for revenge on the psychiatrist that ruined her childhood...

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2 Reviews | 127 pages | 1 year ago | Draft 1

#female protagonist #Revenge #dancer #2024 #gothic

Beatrix is a stripper in Brisbane. She dances to pay her rent and put herself through school. One day, she kills a man in his home and goes to Sydney with her flatmate, on a quest for revenge she's been planning for a decade...

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Well written drama thriller drags on a bit too long

Overall, this was a solid thriller script that I could see being turned into a movie with some fine tuning. I would mainly recommend cutting back on the flashback scenes a bit so that the script doesn't feel like it's overstaying its welcome as well as removing filler dialogue and just fixing those weird formats. Glad I got to read and review this and good luck on future drafts!

Cyle Brooks

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Good

Wow. I was not expecting to enjoy your script that much. I thought it was very well written with a very fleshed out main character and I really liked the ending. I think the pacing was fairly good but I think it dragged a little in the middle due to the flashbacks, it was kind of hard to keep track when in time where the movie was. I would also say flesh out the main character's mother more because I feel like I don't know her enough as well as t...

David Rose

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Carrie's week is going miserably and camp doesn't seem to help. Neither does the fact that there's a killer loose on the campgrounds hellbent on being remembered by his childhood bullies.

Power Vacuum

Disturbing dystopian satire depicting an American who’s fleeing for his dear life due to war ends up in Canada then to France not knowing there’s a war going on there and finds way to escape with a Flemish Belgian and Irishman by his side.

Rescue The President's Daughter

It is up to the Retired CIA Agent David Storm and Ex Navy Seal Jason Rightton to find and kill the terrorist group who kidnapped the president daughter and stop them from releasing the nukes.

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Cyle Brooks

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David Rose

Recommended for You

Perform (Rough Draft)

Carrie's week is going miserably and camp doesn't seem to help. Neither does the fact that there's a killer loose on the campgrounds hellbent on being remembered by his childhood bullies.

Power Vacuum

Disturbing dystopian satire depicting an American who’s fleeing for his dear life due to war ends up in Canada then to France not knowing there’s a war going on there and finds way to escape with a Flemish Belgian and Irishman by his side.

Rescue The President's Daughter

It is up to the Retired CIA Agent David Storm and Ex Navy Seal Jason Rightton to find and kill the terrorist group who kidnapped the president daughter and stop them from releasing the nukes.

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