Overall, this story isn't essentially bad; it only needs a second draft. The philosophical conflict is almost enough, and the concept works quite well. The structure is the only one that needs to be improved a little more; ensure the resolution concludes the story and you're more than halfway there.
When a test pilot is chosen by an ancient force to protect the universe, he’s thrown into a war. As he struggles to find his place among aliens and god-like beings-- such as the Guardians of the Universe-- he’s forced to confront the weight of legacy, loyalty, and leadership.
A depressed young man sends himself back in time in order to avoid the consequences of a violent crime, only to find himself pursued by a vengeful corrupt cop.
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