Overall, this story isn't essentially bad; it only needs a second draft. The philosophical conflict is almost enough, and the concept works quite well. The structure is the only one that needs to be improved a little more; ensure the resolution concludes the story and you're more than halfway there.
An immature restaurant worker is recruited by a local Detroit fast food to run armchain s for the Israeli Militia in Iraq and Kuwait. He is persued by a lofty interpol agent who is seeking some evidence against the Mexican cartel in his jurisdiction.
An ex-con tattoo artist is hired to ink seductive beauties, but when the newly illustrated models turn up dead, he must solve the mystery, clear his name, and evade a corrupt cop on his tail.
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