Overall, this story isn't essentially bad; it only needs a second draft. The philosophical conflict is almost enough, and the concept works quite well. The structure is the only one that needs to be improved a little more; ensure the resolution concludes the story and you're more than halfway there.
Based on the true story in 1931 of a navy wife who claimed she was raped by a gang of Hawaiians, leading to one of them being kidnapped and murdered in a scheme hatched by the girl's mother. Clarence Darrow defended the family in Hawaii's Crime of the Century.
Trying his best to not get swallowed up by the streets of Southside Jamaica, Queens, Trey maneuvers through the standard baby momma drama, systemic racism and socio-economic disenfranchisement that his hood brings, but little does he know that this is the last day of his life.
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