Overall, this story isn't essentially bad; it only needs a second draft. The philosophical conflict is almost enough, and the concept works quite well. The structure is the only one that needs to be improved a little more; ensure the resolution concludes the story and you're more than halfway there.
From the back seat of police cruiser, a father sees his daughter taken out of the back of his car by, Ed, a man he knows from her school. The father must decide if she is better off with him or in the "system" like him. Ed must learn that raising a child isn't about finding personal redemption.
After a shocking discovery of her brother, a young female detective must find means to bring the killer to book or he clutches his hands on the next victim.
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