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6 pages |
5 years ago
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Draft 1
3 friends, Nicholas, Thomas, and Colin, decide to rob Thomas' boss, but this won't just be any type of robbery, no. these cunning and witty men are going to steal his favorite pen, why? because pen's aren't worth anything so they won't end up in jail. or will they?
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The story is simple and COULD have potential. But we don't get to know any of the characters -- they're all cardboard cut outs. Hard to discern one from the other, no distinct traits or ways of speaking.
Also, we spend a lot of time on William Sutton, giving him that grand introduction to his framed picture on a wall. But where was the picture hanging? His only purpose was to inspire the three friends to rob Thomas's boss of his pen.
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