Rearview short
#Drama
By
Dylan
Hall
A young woman learns how to move on from a sudden ending to a relationship with help from her friends and learning to look for the good parts of your past.
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Approved
Nominee Draft #1
Summary
1 Reviews |
10 pages |
4 years ago
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Draft 1
This story follows April, a 22 year old woman, that is working on getting past a relationship suddenly ending, but not doing a great job of handling it on her own. A friend tries to help her move on as she begins seeing ghosts of her past around her. April has to learn to acknowledge the good over the bad so that she can get past the person that hurt her.
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Your writing is spot on. You have obviously worked with the idea and fine-tuned your writing over multiple drafts or previous projects. I enjoyed reading this script, but I did find it a bit lacking. The story itself is mediocre. I wanted more with the hallucinations or April and Sami's relationship.
I think you should work on having a strong sub-plot to push the story forward. Maybe, push April's state of mind. I never truly felt concerned o...
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