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8 pages |
6 years ago
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Draft 2
Leslie and Kate are not friends at all. They should be enemies but on her sick bed, Leslie invites Kate to help take her life.
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My particular areas of concern are in that some sections of dialogue feel as though they are simply filler....where I think the script would have a bit more emotional punch if it cuts right to the point and maybe expands on the theme of assisted suicide just a bit. The text message portion the script was a bit hard for me to grasp and it seems as though the conversation might be meant to be a bit ambiguous. Intentional on your part perhaps? I w...
I'm a little bit of a weirdo and i always like to see the way a writer writes not just in the dialogue but in the action and direction, and this script did grab me right from the beginning, although I don't think the use of the word "Fuck" was entirely necessary, especially as it appears nowhere else in the dialogue or action of the rest of the film. I thought that Kate's character was likeable enough, its one of those situations where the protag...
The characters, in my opinion, are not developed enough for this story to be believable. There are more questions as to why anyone is doing what they are doing in the story than there are answers. Why is Kate there? She's having an affair with Leslie's husband...why would she go? There could easily be something in the opening scene that directly expresses that. Kate's there, so there should be a very strong reason for that. Why is Leslie doing th...
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