I'll just go over my thoughts in chronological order as I read your script. (I enjoyed it by the way)
1ST PAGE
- Good character intro and description, immediately paints a clear first impression of who Darius is
- Intriguing situation to start off in, following a trail, searching for a phone… (his own maybe ?)
- (OS), Offscreen or over the shoulder? It’s just a detail but the formatting is wrong, not very clear
- The segment where Darius...
When a mild-mannered Irish servant kills her brutal attacker, a British Lord, she flees for her life, hunted by his sadistic son-in-law who’s implacable as he is cruel and determined to “make the Irish slattern pay!”
In the year 2287, the investigation of a Detroit transportation hub bombing leads two corporate investigators to the mega-city's inhospitable foundation level to hunt down a bomber that may or may not be human.
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