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The Farmers

By Christine Locker

An elderly couple confront unresolved rivalry when they receive a visit from an estranged family member.

Draft #1
Peer Rating: 60%
Industry Rating: N/A
2 Reviews | 5 pages | 2 years ago | Draft 1


Fay and Jack (both in their 70s) lead isolated lives on a desolate and unproductive farm.

Fay does some serious cleaning up of the house, causing Jack to question what is going on.

Fay proudly announces that a family member is coming to visit, her sister, Mary.

Dinner ends up in a confrontational situation as unresolved issues from their past are discussed.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

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The concept is interesting but it doesn't seem to have any pay off, or any underlying message or theme. I would recommend you expand perhaps on the concept and see what else comes out of it.

Okay, I'm going to talk a bit about story and structure of the story together. There is nothing evidently clear that the characters want, or need, and this makes for a shallow story...

2 years ago |
Was the story clear? Yes. It was good in the dynamic relationship between the bitter old couple. You can easily see in the story that there is no love, no passion, and no respect between them.

The premise was very believable. It kind of reminded me of the Courage the Cowardly Dog show on Cartoon Network.

What did you like the most? I liked the vivid scene-setting and descriptive actions. Fay beating the rug blow dust into her husband's fa...

2 years ago |

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