So this script is not a promising look into someone else's story idea. The formatting, while attempting to recreate what a screenplay looks like, it's pretty clear that you went into word and tried to format from there. Get a screenwriting software like Writerduet or StudioBinder or FinalDraft. It'll make it easier for a reader to read through and help you with your formatting. Aside from that, work on your characters, structure and dialogue, and...
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