Great job on the script. I could only say to take a look at the story Vince is pitching and try to story board it. It might help make clear sense for a reader, and don't be afraid to be descriptive.
There is a lot of potential here. A short is under forty pages. I would recommend using that to your advantage to flesh out the story and characters. Possibly even turn it into a feature. But, that is up to you. Good luck on future drafts in your script.
When an old woman in the end stages of Alzheimer's suddenly recalls family milestones, she struggles to make sure her daughter knows she was briefly remembered and always loved before her mind forever fades away.
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