Shadow Walker feature
#Action/Adventure #Crime #Thriller
By
T.
Cuesta
Chronicles the DEA's expulsion from Venezuela in 2005, when the first female SEAL infiltrated the villa of the country's most dangerous gang, posing as a surgeon, to carry out a target assassination against their wounded boss.
Awards
Approved
Winner Draft #1
Summary
1 Reviews |
102 pages |
3 years ago
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Draft 16
Chronicles the operation that got the DEA expelled from Venezuela, and the inception of the 'Cartel of the Suns', the world's biggest drug cartel, in 2005.
The DEA sents a stealth operative, the first frogwoman in SEAL's history, to infiltrate a secure cartel stronghold, posing as a surgeon, to terminate the country's top crime boss, who was in need of immediate medical attention after being shot.
The DEA sents a stealth operative, the first frogwoman in SEAL's history, to infiltrate a secure cartel stronghold, posing as a surgeon, to terminate the country's top crime boss, who was in need of immediate medical attention after being shot.
Industry Reviews
This is already a brilliant script. It’s got fantastic actions, great goals, a superb protagonist, and some great twists and turns and is very nearly as good as it could be.
However, I would say that I didn’t fully follow all the twists and turns at the end, with the DEA, the military, and the government, and they somewhat felt that they were there just for the sake of it. Maybe bake them in earlier or slim them down a bit if possible.
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This story has a strong opening that introduces us to the tortured mind of our protagonist, Alexa Walker, AKA: Shadow Walker. The introduction of Eva Rivera follows. I commend the character development of both of these characters. Alexa Walker is a highly skilled Navy SEAL, the first frogwoman, who was the sole survivor of her special ops team. Her comrades tortured bodies haunt her. Perhaps there is a fine line between bravery and suicidal in...
Action is written well and easy to visualise. Lots of it if that is your thing. There isn't a lot other than action though. However, certainly lots of movies just like that and personally I find them all a bit of white noise, much like the movies themselves. This one fits right in that slot.
One man army is a badass who comes back for one last job to take down a nasty villain because "insert dramatic need". Describes about half a million movies...
The characters aren't really multi-faceted. They are all pretty simple characters that don't change much as the story progresses. The background for Alexa has been done before and your approach to it isn't really unique, at all. Additionally, there are too many characters at the beginning. There is a conversation between Alexa and Bishop hinting at tensions between Alexa and the rest of the team but nothing really goes further here with what happ...
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