Wanna See


By C G

Faced with overwhelming hardship, a young woman escapes her personal life and enters the world of online modeling.

Draft #1
Peer Rating: 80%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 2: 80%
Draft 1: 80%
1 Reviews | 61 pages | 1 month ago | Draft 2


Harper Ames is a 24-year-old student. Despite her healthy social life and new career in student teaching, she is drowning in personal woes. Her life is dominated by student debt, bulimia, relationship anxiety, and caring for her dying father who was recently diagnosed with cancer. The problems leave her feeling lonely and lost, and one day, she decides to relieve those feelings by creating an online profile to post lewd photos of herself. As she gains attention and adoration from her anonymous followers, she becomes drawn to the online world where she can not only forget, but perhaps, solve her real life problems.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

Ok, so this definitely one of the best first drafts I've read. It is really good. I think if you take all the criticism you gain, this will turn out to be a perfect script. I think for me one of the best things about this script is that it actually SHOWS and doesn't TELL. I've noticed that problem in so many first drafts, so it's nice to see a writer that understands. I really want to see more from this script, I'm excited to see what else comes...

3 days ago |
Marlon Schwiersch Top Reviewer
This is a new scriptmother format, which is what it is. Here's the real review.

This is an excellent script. Everything is here. The characters, the plot, the relationships, the dialogue. EXCELLENT WORK on doing what you set out to do. I am not the target market. I'm actually the anti-market for this.

It's filled with woke points, so there's a definite market. By woke points I mean: "instruments of death eradicated from society", Father w...

5 months ago |
Van Lutz Top Reviewer
Pg. 1. I like how you inform us about your main character through
her browsing history. Show don't tell!

Pg. 3. Harper hasn't spoken a word, but I already feel terrible for
her. See seems so obsessed with looking a certain way that she's
forcing herslef to vomit. While I haven't dealt with this problem
myself, I'm sure a lot of people will unfortunately be able to
relate to this.

Pg. 4. It's interesting how Harper keeps staring at...

5 months ago |
Jonathan Barbour Top Reviewer

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