A couple spends a night in a film theater. But as the night deepens, things become nightmarish and surreal.
A film about seeing.
As a couple spends a night in a film theater, nightmares escape through the screen. Designed to be told through a single static camera, PAURA is a surrealist short horror film inspired by the works of Bunuel, Dali, and David Lynch.
I genuinely didn't understand the concept too well. It didn't have much purpose and the only shock value was the word "plak" that was written in caps on the last page.
- Does the logline/first ten pages draw the reader?
The logline gave enough info, but again, there wasn't much to draw from in the story.
- Are scenes well-written?
Meh. It wasn't terribly written, but there was a lot to be desired. In 3 s...
Apparently, at 12, a baby gets born out of the death of an Angel. For the viewer, this leaves a lot of questions. There is zero explanation about any of it. Is this a private viewing? What does the movie have to do with it all? There i...
The reason for the fairs and the passes –
Honestly, the symbolism and metaphors (if they are actually there) I do not understand.
The “fear” (Pauna), doesn’t really play a part in either The Angel or Diane’s story. Diane has fear watching the film. But, it’s the growth and explosion that plays more a part of her story.
As a person who is not rel...
"We are facing the blank screen. We hear an unseen couple enter and take a seat." Who is "we"? I'm not sure if you were referring to a camera angle or just using the term "we".
Dialogue is awesome.
Action and narrative can use some work.
The first page got me curious to keep going.
It will be better to have two distinctive names. David and Diane are similar thus confusing sometimes.
Climax is good. I didn't see it coming.
I thought this was an interesting, if kind of ridicules, way to murder his wife and to get a baby. I do not know why he would have to do it this way, but that’s probably another story. I was confused by the fact that Diane was still able to talk, during what was happening to her,...
This is someone trying very hard to do their David Lynch impression in the shortest possible time-span.
At barely 3 pages, this is more of a scene, and less a screenplay.
This was typed on a type-writer and scanned into a .pdf and 20-30% of the sc...
A clown named Lubu befriends a homeless man, Sammy, as they walk to a child's birthday party. At first I was not intrigued becuase the story didn't really hit right in the middle for me. But the end really surpr
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Personally, I think that the biggest problem of your script is the beginning. I really think that it would be better if you showed us the characters before entering the theatre. We don't really know the relationship of the two protagonists, are they mar...
I'd like to mention the fact that the names of the two main characters start with the same letter. This should never be done in scripts, especially with ma...
Was the theater empty/full? Was this a snuff film or horror that David and Diane watch?
Some formatting is needed. For example, when Diane starts screaming, the action needs to be on a separate line of the dialogue.
The 3 men in the film. Age? What are they wearing? How can we visualize t...
Then you seem to have the characters speaking loudly, when at a movie theater (even at a Horror Movie) others would be shooing the characters the whole time and the Usher or Manger would be kicking them out. Then The screaming, this is another thing... At first the other viewers would think that Diane is Just scared...