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Stay Awake Mary short

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By Barry John Terblanche

The smallest of good deeds are life rewarding. This, Mary will discover tonight.

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1 Reviews | 9 pages | 4 years ago | Draft 1

#Female Lead #Interfaith Relationship ##mystery #Life and Death

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Good concept, clumsy execution.

Writer, awesome concept. Really great short with a great twist. That being said, the twist is pretty easy to spot early on in the story.
I had difficulty with the dialog. Mary seemed to speak with an older voice than her character was meant to be. She is introduced as 40 but some of her dialog comes off as elderly.
Additionally, there were more than several spelling errors. Please proofread your material before posting it for review. I found...

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