1. Concept - I liked what you went with for the concept. Having a troubled son and his wife try to follow in the footsteps of his father in the hitman business. I thought that was great!
2. Story - The story started out fairly good in the first act. However, a bit into the second act, it starts going in multiple directions that are a bit hard to follow along with. I think if it was tied together more wi...
When a mob boss uses dangerous methods to fix horse races on Derby Day, a corny joke telling handicapper, executing his own safe cheating scheme, battles to turn some asinine cheats against the mob enforcer before the horses he loves are hurt.
When overwhelmed Santa cancels his Christmas Eve gift deliveries for a road trip filled with comical misadventures, his party hearty traveling buddy struggles to end Santa's Pause before kids wake up to zero presents Christmas morning.
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