You've got a fantastic premise here and the script is really set alight by the brilliance of the dialogue. The plot makes sense but what really needs work is the underlying story and the thematic argument. This is the hard work but if done correctly will really make the script exceptional. I would concentrate in the next draft on Hank's flaw and his arc and how that arc expresses the thematic argument. For me that argument is around the area of a...
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So, I just finished reading a screenplay called "Dibble and Dabble". The genre of this script is labeled as a comedy. I am a huge fan of comedies. When I read the logline line of this script "J Edgar Hoover gives a rookie agent an assignment to bring to justice dangerous radicals...the Marx Brothers.", I busted out laughing and I knew right then and there, I needed to read this screenplay. I am personally a HUGE fan of the Marx Brothers. They we...
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