Overall, this script covers no new ground and becomes increasingly frustrating to read as the poor dialogue and messy story structure snowball into what I can only describe as an unfortunate mistake if I am trying to be somewhat polite. For this script to be more successful, it needs to find a way to discover some originality in its genre, tighten up the plot, and really hone in on developing the characters.
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